21 March 2011

Spring Tanka

Lately I've been trying to experiment with the English-language version of the 5-7-5-7-7 Japanese tanka. In the first two lines, the aim of the tanka is to describe an experience and its image in concrete terms. In the following three lines, the goal is to portray the feelings and thoughts of that moment. Although the English-language tanka can break the syllable count, I'm going to try to stick to it in my attempts and use it as a starting point for today's attempt:
my boyfriend's arms wrap
around the budding elm tree
     that passion will last
     through all our days together
     at least, i really hope so


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